What have you see?
Seen
He will find you and took your soul again.
Take
remnants
Remains
Про артикли и остальное не уверен. В целом, есть смысл воспользоваться реддитом или ещё чем, где ошибки исправят носители. Ну и покритикуют заодно
Здравствуйте! С друзьями готовим небольшой мини-альбом, осталась последняя песня, но на ее счет оч сильно сомневаюсь. Не проверите, Пожалуйста, все ли грамотно написано?
What have you done? What have you see?
This is edge of insanity!
It’s in your blood. In your mind.
Like a blind you don’t see your dying mind.
Now you fall Into the time!
This is doom of your life!
It’s in your blood. In your mind
Like a blind you don’t see.
In a dancing of the death you can’t survive.
But remnants of the pain can play this game!
The Devil looks on you. Why you run away?
He will find you and took your soul again.
Once upon in acid dream I heard you fearful scream.
You’ve been alone so long just lost in the darkness.
In a dancing of the death you can’t survive.
But remnants of the pain can play this game!
What have you see?
He will find you and took your soul again.
remnants
The Devil look at you